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Default Another Track: "Li Phone"

Here's another track I recently completed from my forthcoming album:
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Thanks in advance for taking a listen and sharing your thoughts!
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Old 08-05-2021, 06:51 AM   #2
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I love the sounds here, almost reminds me of extreme or queensryche

very cool, like the drum sounds, and bass.

somehow I think the intro could be spicer but kinda irrelevant compared to the actual song
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I love the sounds here, almost reminds me of extreme or queensryche

very cool, like the drum sounds, and bass.

somehow I think the intro could be spicer but kinda irrelevant compared to the actual song
Hi Jae, thank for listening and responding… any suggestions to make the intro spicier?
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Hi Jae, thank for listening and responding… any suggestions to make the intro spicier?
well I feel like it might be cliche, but maybe some more ambience, atmosphere...

reverb, some pads, but I wouldn't want them to persist in the rest of the song because it sounds so tight
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well I feel like it might be cliche, but maybe some more ambience, atmosphere...

reverb, some pads, but I wouldn't want them to persist in the rest of the song because it sounds so tight
Ok, thanks - I'll check that out!
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Nice mix overall! The song seem a little all over the place, composition wise. Not sure if that was what you were going for?

Only critique (mix wise) I have is that the voice is slightly harsh in some places (sibilance wise) to my ears.

Just my 2 cents...

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Nice mix overall! The song seem a little all over the place, composition wise. Not sure if that was what you were going for?

Only critique (mix wise) I have is that the voice is slightly harsh in some places (sibilance wise) to my ears.

Just my 2 cents...

Hey Pink Wool! Thanks taking the time to listen and comment - I appreciate it.

In terms of arrangement, you're right - I am playing around with the usual verse/chorus paradigm. I went pretty traditional on my last album (see link below), but I'm being a little more adventurous here...

Still, the structure is ultimately pretty traditional, just with just a slight twist:
Intro > verse 1 > B section > verse 2 > Chorus 1 > Verse 3 > Chorus 2 > Bridge > B Section > Lead Break > (Breakdown) Chorus 3 > Chorus 4
The twist is that the "B Section" is kind of a "false prechorus"... It feels like it is building to the chorus, but then subverts expectations - that was pretty deliberate.

In terms of the sibilance/harshness you mentioned - can you be more specific about exactly where you are hearing it? Thanks.
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Did you used to hang out on recordingreview.com?
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Did you used to hang out on recordingreview.com?
Yes - that's me - one and the same.. you too?
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Well, throughout S's and T's are quite loud but mostly in the "All your promises" part
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Well, throughout S's and T's are quite loud but mostly in the "All your promises" part
Thanks! Ah, that's great - I'll see if I can iron that out. Much appreciated - Cheers!
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