The Name Of The Song

[Erpers]

Put this together this evening.
Work in progress, again .....

I quite like the feel, the melody but it's very raw.
Feedback, ideas etc would be much appreciated.
Thanks in advance.

https://soundcloud.com/landslide-vic...me-of-the-song

[Erpers]

Having revisited this a few times over the last week or so, I'd appreciate some input as to whether this is one to shelve or whether there's anything to work on.

Anybody kind enough to feedback what's good, what's not so good, what sucks.

Thanks.