Ok So taking onboard all the advice, I gave this a go.
Its on a private link as I'm not to sure about it at the moment.
https://soundcloud.com/tim-wheeler-7.../s-BbBUkN9wpAM
Again I'm really interested in your thoughts on production, I haven't given it loads of thought or implemented anything as yet. (the guitar is a bit loud but I'm hungry...)
Also if it has those bits you think should be in there, melody, break, chorus (not sure if it has one of those.)
Literally just any feedback about progression or digression over the last track. .
Thanks Tim.