Old 10-20-2018, 01:14 PM   #1
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Hi all,

Working on a new song idea. So far the basic parts are complete and chorus lyrics. Feedback most welcome:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-lint...eneration-rev0

NEW GENERATION
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

VERSE 1 (pending)

Government, now that’s joke
Spend today, tomorrow broke
Got new admiration
For the new generation
Someone turned the light off
From future’s bright payoff
Got new admiration
For the new generation

VERSE 2 (pending)

Government, now that’s joke
Spend today, tomorrow broke
Got new admiration
For the new generation
Someone turned the light off
From future’s bright payoff
Got new admiration
For the new generation
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Old 10-21-2018, 06:21 AM   #2
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Here is the completed song. Vocals could be tighter, but this is just a demo to get the idea down:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-lint...eneration-rev2

NEW GENERATION
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

Todays’ generation’s
A painful cremation
Burning oil, belching fumes
They protest, the farce resumes
Easy life today
Our future we repay
Nothing you can do or say
Plastic, toxic, doomsday

Government, now that’s joke
Spend today, tomorrow broke
Got new admiration
For the new generation
Someone turned the light off
From future’s bright payoff
Got new admiration
For the new generation

Get elected, lifetime seat
Cozy life, can’t be beat
Vote for those who pay you good
Change your course, like driftwood
Easy life today
Our future we repay
Nothing you can do or say
Plastic, toxic, doomsday

Government, now that’s joke
Spend today, tomorrow broke
Got new admiration
For the new generation
Someone turned the light off
From future’s bright payoff
Got new admiration
For the new generation

SOLO

Government, now that’s joke
Spend today, tomorrow broke
Got new admiration
For the new generation
Someone turned the light off
From future’s bright payoff
Got new admiration
For the new generation

New generation, new generation….
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Old 11-12-2018, 05:56 PM   #3
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Here is the completed song. Vocals could be tighter, but this is just a demo to get the idea down:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-lint...eneration-rev2

NEW GENERATION
That sounds great Jonathan. Your vocals sound radio ready to me.
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Old 11-12-2018, 06:27 PM   #4
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Wow, I just left a few words on another track elsewhere. Didn't know you were a Reaper user. This track sounds great, too. I know it is just a demo, but there is some pumping going on early in the track. Not sure if it is a sidechain issue or a limiting artifact, but it is worth looking at.

I never say this, but it would be great if you could carve more space for the vocals somehow. You have such a great voice that it would be nice to have it more prominent.

Enjoyed!
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Old 11-22-2020, 12:47 PM   #5
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Hi all,

Did a reboot, spruce up and guitar retrack of this song. Here is the improved version. Hope you enjoy - feedback most welcome:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6X09skFXSI0
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Old 11-22-2020, 12:53 PM   #6
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I love this, you definitely have an amazing voice and excellent writing skills
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Old 11-22-2020, 02:22 PM   #7
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Yes !!
Echo what's already been said.
I've said it before and need to say it again. Very impressed with your development and always increasing skill at mixing, writing, performances and over all production. Hats off to you sir !!
The only thing that I feel could be improved on (this is strictly a personal taste thing) is the pattern of rhyming used in lyrics. I believe every track I've heard uses the same pattern. Again nothing wrong with this but for me I would like to see a change from the every two line concept. I think it would bring more interest to a particular song and when listening to a collection of songs it would definitely help differentiate from track to track. Just my two cents.
Keep kicking ass
Great job Jonathan!!!
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Old 11-23-2020, 01:28 AM   #8
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Hi all,

Did a reboot, spruce up and guitar retrack of this song.
Here is the improved version. Hope you enjoy - feedback most welcome:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6X09skFXSI0
Very nice, brilliant guitar start - I like that. Great text
that addresses shortness of breath and debt policy.
The guitar work is very impressive. Well done!
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