Old 04-19-2018, 02:05 PM   #1
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This is a song I made today, I hope some of you enjoy it. Its Electronic but with mostly smooth tones, and is fairly empty.

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

UPDATED LINK % MIX : https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmu...-you-2/s-M3V8t

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Old 04-20-2018, 09:14 AM   #2
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Updated the link with a better mix(lower kick).
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Old 04-20-2018, 10:44 AM   #3
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Sounding good and natural! next ! : P
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Old 04-20-2018, 01:21 PM   #4
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Can't believe I'm using this word, but nice n punchy.
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Old 04-20-2018, 01:27 PM   #5
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Sounds great!

Can I ask what you use for the drums/percussion? Samples or vst? They always sound great on your tracks.

If I were to offer a critique, I would say you could maybe play with the stereo field a little more. It's certainly not super narrow, but I think a little more extreme panning might make it even bigger/wider.
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Old 04-20-2018, 02:31 PM   #6
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SHIT!! Not my glass of juice but I still ADORE IT!!!!!
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Old 04-21-2018, 02:30 AM   #7
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Sounds great!

Can I ask what you use for the drums/percussion? Samples or vst? They always sound great on your tracks.

If I were to offer a critique, I would say you could maybe play with the stereo field a little more. It's certainly not super narrow, but I think a little more extreme panning might make it even bigger/wider.
I use a combination of recorded claps and snaps and samples. I dont have a snare so the snare you hear in the first drop of the chorus is a sample recorded from someones vintage kit.

Then When Im recording it doesnt nearly sound like crisp samples you hear in the expensive sample packs you find on the interscape, so I use ALOT of saturation and EQ.

And more stereo will come, thats a good idea.
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Old 04-21-2018, 02:31 AM   #8
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SHIT!! Not my glass of juice but I still ADORE IT!!!!!
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Yes! Every follower counts my man Thanks msundh
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Old 04-25-2018, 05:06 PM   #9
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A big thumbs up for this!

Although presumably a totally different genre, it reminds me a bit on Zappa's "Amnerika" in the way you mixed the vocal samples.

To take up L_Grizzle's proposal: some more stereo-field experimenting could bring even more life into this track. But I love it anyway!
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Old 04-29-2018, 07:54 AM   #10
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Lovely as always... Creativity abounds from start to finish... What a landscape you paint!
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Old 05-03-2018, 04:21 AM   #11
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I'm really into these tracks you're making, what Mark said, very musically emotive, cheers Luke.
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Old 05-03-2018, 07:20 AM   #12
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Thanks for the nice feedback guys.

Now i kmow your all being nice but let be honest , it aint perfect!

So, what would you add/remove to the track to improve it?

I would really love to release this on the "Nourish" youtube channel but atm my song pales in comparison
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Old 05-03-2018, 11:00 AM   #13
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I didn't get a feeling of this track needing anything further, if I had to add something it might be some percussive flourishes toward the end, drum fills or such, or maybe some intermittent new fx voice , but again, probably only in the final 15 or 20 seconds or so.
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Old 05-03-2018, 12:10 PM   #14
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How do you mean "pales?" If it's the mix, it sounds great to me. If it's the arrangement, I don't think I'm "attuned" enough to make a good suggestion (unless something sounded obviously "off," which isn't the case for me).
The only thing I've noticed, that I think has been mentioned before, is that it sounds very L/R/C. I'd use more of the full stereo spectrum. But in your defense, I've heard other similar tunes with that same LRC sound, so I assume that's expected.
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Old 05-03-2018, 05:19 PM   #15
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https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmu...ut-her/s-0ZfD6

Updated the mix and arrangement with some of your suggestions

Thanks for the tips guys, Tomorrow ill work on the bass notes a little
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Old 05-07-2018, 11:49 AM   #16
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Very nice feel to it. Experimental and arty to my ears, and of course a touch of melancholia. And I like the origami bird. Tasteful, all in all.
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Old 06-17-2018, 11:12 AM   #17
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Updated the track a bit :

Hope I didnt mess it up

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmu...ut-you/s-psp9A

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Old 06-20-2018, 12:43 PM   #18
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Annnnnddd another

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmu...-you-2/s-M3V8t

Lowered the kick, changed the bass and hopefully improved the master. Reaching the final result!
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