Old 05-15-2019, 09:52 AM   #1
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Old 05-17-2019, 09:11 AM   #2
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There is a good song and arrangement in there, but the performances need practice. Has a sort of feel of the Rolling Stones. It's a fun tune that would be tons better with lots of tightening up.
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Old 05-17-2019, 03:02 PM   #3
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Yeah, timing is kinda avantgarde. Makes it sound like it's edited off not quite fitting elements.
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Old 05-17-2019, 03:32 PM   #4
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Thanks guys, I'm using 39/47 time sig on some of that, didn't always come off, so, avante garde it is, or maybe I'lI round it out a bit.

I record RG tracks often within 5 minutes of messing around with an idea, so that gives an idea why I end up with timing issues here and there, cheers.
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Old 05-17-2019, 04:24 PM   #5
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Gotta echo the others and what bwreck said is *exactly* what I thought: this could be a REALLY great song if tightened up. Makes me think of early Bowie.
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Old 05-17-2019, 04:44 PM   #6
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Ronson era Bowie...something? I also notice that.
Les Paul sound/playstyle? (the guitar I see in your avatar?)
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Old 05-18-2019, 02:22 AM   #7
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Gotta echo the others and what bwreck said is *exactly* what I thought: this could be a REALLY great song if tightened up. Makes me think of early Bowie.
Thanks Sammy, the timing got untidy after arrangement changes mostly, after a while I guess I didn't hear it but I've gone through and counted out the beat [which of course should mainly be just syncopated 4/4 and sometimes 2/4] Anyways I've tightened up and fixed drums and bass today, I'll post version 2 in a day or so, cheers.
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Thanks guys, I'm using 39/47 time sig on some of that, didn't always come off, so, avante garde it is, or maybe I'lI round it out a bit.

I record RG tracks often within 5 minutes of messing around with an idea, so that gives an idea why I end up with timing issues here and there, cheers.
No need to rush it. Nothing is half completed without obligatory three week period of obsessive tracking, retracking, mixing, remixing and waking up one day and noticing you hate everything and starting over (mixdown25_bass-3.5db_doubled_guitars_less_hihats_alt_ver14.wav). There are people that can put together a coherent tune instantly, but that's not the most of us I guess.
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Old 05-18-2019, 02:43 AM   #9
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No need to rush it. Nothing is half completed without obligatory three week period of obsessive tracking, retracking, mixing, remixing and waking up one day and noticing you hate everything and starting over (mixdown25_bass-3.5db_doubled_guitars_less_hihats_alt_ver14.wav). There are people that can put together a coherent tune instantly, but that's not the most of us I guess.
But that's why I track really soon after I get the idea, trying to capture some enthusiasm, but bc it's not really played to a grid it can get messy with arrangements changing. iow I sometimes don't just record early, I'm banging out chords and writing the song on the fly, but that sometimes needs a bit of patience tidying up.

Thanks for commenting ZK, you guys spurred me into action on it, version 2 posted here soon.
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Old 05-22-2019, 09:22 PM   #10
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Nice guitar playing and tone. Organ also.

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...I'm using 39/47 time sig on some of that...
I'm going to steal that idea.
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Old 05-30-2019, 10:23 PM   #11
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Thanks TL, I put the track back in the wip rotation, would have been easier to rehearse it a couple of times in the first place though, cheers.
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Old 06-03-2019, 12:31 PM   #12
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Sounds like you've got a start and with the adjustments others have noted should make for a better next version.
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I tould you It'd be at least three weeks lol.
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I'm thinking what everyone else has already said ... timing. The drums are just way off, but you can fix that with some better playing (or maybe some programming in EZDrummer).

But yeah, the song itself does remind me of those early Bowie blues-rockers. It's cool. Now just get a good, tight "band" to play it and you're good to go.
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I fixed the timing back when but didn't get around to reimporting the keyboard track and realigning it yet, I kinda got hooked into a bunch of other tracks in the rotation, some of which I'll post also, cheers.
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https://soundcloud.com/user-75039506...-life-makeover

Maybe [for one thing ] it should be slightly faster?
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