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Old 10-27-2021, 04:55 PM   #3
Stinger
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Entertaining song. Sort of indie / pop, to me.

Gotta say, had to strain to make out the lyrics in first couple of verses - the instrumental (guitar?/bass?) melody seems to be matched with the vocal melody. Contrast that to a verse near the end when the instrumentation is intentionally more punctuated - lyrics very clear there.

Not that you should punctuate the earlier section at all - but maybe alter the instrumental melody line, or just tone it down some to keep from competing with the vocal. That 2nd option may be the easier change to make at this point.

Then again, my ears are not the same as other ears (in many ways). BTW, listening through headphones.
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